<p>anyone out there willing to read my appeals letter?</p>
<p>I can critique it, if you would like. </p>
<p>I’ll read it 
</p>
<p>really? okay thanks! i just sent you guys it @JewBacca @ocnative </p>
<p>I’ll read it. I just finished my appeal letter and I think i have a good sense of what they are looking for, cuz I read the essays of people who were accepted </p>
<p>I can help too!</p>
<p>Count me in!</p>
<p>okay thanks! this is my very first draft so dont be afriad to be brutally honest. and if anyone wants someone to read theirs id be glad too @dell15 @CalBruin @bomerr
also do you mind sharing where you found letters that got in?</p>
<p>@Bookham
I asked a bunch of people on here, on college confidential, and at my local community college. </p>
<p>@bomerr I did exactly what you did! I’ve literally never worked so hard on an essay in my life!</p>
<p>you can send it too me too, I would love to read and tell you my honest opinion </p>
<p>@purple4 okay thank you so much! ill send you my new draft over</p>
<p>WOW…i am impressed it is well written … and i truly think you put yourself out there as far as convincing them to admit you !!!. have you sumbitted already >? ,… PS: you have some really strong points such as the living close with your parents, and i love how smoothly you added the UCLA part. without being cocky about it ! … @Bookham </p>
<p>I will read it. :)</p>
<p>Not that I like to toot my own horn or anything, but I am know to write LEGEN–WAIT FOR IT- DARY, LEGENDARY papers. I will take a look if that is fine. </p>
<p>@Tik1127 </p>
<p>HIMYM had a terrible ending.</p>
<p>Never heard of it. </p>
<p>Hi Bookham, just out of curiosity, what are the major changes that happened for your appeal? I want to write one to Berkeley too but there aren’t any changes in terms of academics/life/whatever for me to justify writing an appeal…</p>
<p>@agreatperhaps13 okay thank you so much! ill send it to you right away
@Tik1127 haha oh you are? thatd be awesome if you could look at it
@Cayton i liked it 
although it was kind of predictable, but still i thought it was interesting
@toughTulip for my appeal i talked about some circumstances in my life that i didnt really mention in my application previously cause i couldnt really find anywhere to write about it in my original application. and so i talked about how it kind of affected my grades/ generally why i really want to go to UC Berkeley. i can send you my draft and you can see what i mean if you want :)</p>
<p>@Bookham, I reread your essay and on second glace I think it would work better if you got straight to the point. Your parents being ill and you wanting to be at their side / to help them. I think that stuff is really important and it seems buried in the middle of the essay. At the same time, like I said, you have too much stuff in your appeal that real weakens it. You need to make it sounds like Berkeley is “THE” school for you, that you “MUST” go there instead of coming off luke warm. </p>
<p>@toughTulip
Whatever you wrote in your original essay, write the exact opposite. Generally speaking they made an impression of you based on your original essays, if you want another shot of getting in you need to write something that frames you in a completely different light. </p>