UC Essay (another one)

College Essays
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<p>Can someone read over one of my short answer essays and tell me whether my tone is too formal? I was aiming for conciseness, though possibly at the expense of creativity. Any other criticisms would be greatly appreciated!</p>

<p>Need quick replies too!</p>

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<p>i'd love to help, pm me</p>

3

<p>pm me, i'll read it</p>

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<p>Remember, a 200 word limit is MEANT to be concise.</p>

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<p>yea I'll read it..pm me</p>

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<p>I will, pm me!</p>