UC essay, help much appreciated!

<p>hey, i was wondering if anyone could help me by critiquing my essay for prompt 2
the pickier you are the better!
thanks alot!</p>

<p>pm me, I will take a look.</p>

<p>Sure, I'd be glad to take a look. I've already submitted my UC app.</p>

<p>Sure, I would love to read you essay and provide you some feedback! PM your essay to me and will read it over ;]</p>