Uc Essay Revision Needed!

College Essays
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<p>It's my rough draft.
I know it's not that good but I don't know how to revise it.
Any feedbacks/revisions will be great.
Please help.</p>

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<p>send it over.</p>

3

<p>ill look at it</p>

4

<p>Thank you. I sent my essay.
Anyone else willing to read my essay?</p>

5

<p>ill do it.</p>

6

<p>yeah send it over!</p>

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<p>send it my way, i'd be glad to help</p>

8

<p>send it over!</p>

9

<p>i'll read it also</p>

10

<p>i'll read it</p>

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<p>send it over</p>

12

<p>PM Me, ill proof read it</p>

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<p>PM it. I'll read it. I JUST submitted my UC application last night. (Woot!)</p>