UC Freshman Essay Critique?

College Essays
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<p>Would anyone like to read/comment/critique my uc freshman app? its like 550 words so im trying to cut it down/get some second opinions on it.
i would be most gratefull...thanks!
oh and id be happy to read any others if you would like me to </p>

<p>MUCHOS GRACIAS SENORS Y SENORITASSSSS</p>

<p>pm me if you would like to read...</p>

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<p>I’ll read it.</p>

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<p>Sure, send it on over.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

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<p>I’d read! Just PM!</p>