UC Personal Statement Critique????????

College Essays
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<p>Hey Guys! So I just finished writing and editing my second UC essay. The prompt was </p>

<p>"Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations." </p>

<p>Could someone look over this essay for me and give me your advice? I would have gone and asked some of my teachers, but since everyone's one break, I have no way of doing this. So for this reason, I really need help! I would like to submit my UC application in as soon as possible, so if you're interested, please PM me! It would mean the world to me:)</p>

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<p>i wouldnt mind reading it and making corrections i have been giving feedback to my friends and they all like what i said</p>

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<p>I would love to, pm me!</p>

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<p>Sure, copy and paste it in a PM and send it to me.</p>

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<p>I can! PM me :slight_smile: I’ve already sent mine in so no worries about plagiarism! I like reading them haha</p>