uc personal statement..newborn baby to OB-GYN!

<p>can i get some help?
is this a good start? im stuck on how to make it flow or what to do next?</p>

<p>Describe the world you come from, for example, your family, community or school, and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

<pre><code>A newborn baby who comes into the world may not know anything, but let’s others decide for them. As they grow older through the cycles of life they learn to think for themselves and learn from their mistakes. As I start to hatch into the real world I have set goals for myself while my parents keep fantasizing my future. I come from a world where people are not very encouraging, thinking I will not make it very far. I plan to prove them wrong as I have a desire to pursue a career as an OB-GYN.
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<p>help please ? :(</p>

<p>kinda passive… idk the baby analogy is a good idea just the way its worded doesnt work for me sorry
how does it relate to you? im kinda confused on that</p>