UC personal statement?

<p>Hey guys
can you guys help me out a bit with UC Personal statements 1?
the question is so broad that i have a hard time nailing it down to a approachable level.
And I have an essay that I cranked out yesterday but I dont know if it's good enough to be used as a personal statement
If you want to give me a feedback on this essay, I'll send it to you through PM </p>

<p>and for personal statement 2, Im thinking about how I changed my view about gay rights </p>