<p>Agree with sos80. It’s very disjointed. The atlas is a nice metaphor, but you need to tell us exactly how you got from alienated homebody to having fantasies of meeting new people all over the world; Plus, I’m betting you can come up with a more interesting reason why you want to be an engineer than the very cliched “Every life is precious and I want to help people.”</p>
<p>Are you a native English speaker? This is also full of grammatical errors, sentence fragments and really odd phrases that detract from the point you are trying to make. </p>