Ugh. Can someone read over my essay and give me an opinion?

<p>I finished Princeton's influential person supplement essay. I did it pretty quick but now that I read back on it, I don't get a good "vibe" from it. I don't know if it puts me in the best light. Can someone read it and tell me what they think? Thanks in advance! I also need someone to read it for "flow".</p>

<p>I’d be glad to read it and comment on the flow and my general impression, if you’d like. I also applied to Princeton RD, just so you know, but I doubt it matters much now ^^</p>

<p>Thanks! I sent you the essay.</p>

<p>go on then</p>

<p>Yeah sure.PM me.</p>

<p>I’d be happy to help, if it’s not too late. You can find my email on my blog, which my profile here links to.</p>