<p>Can someone look over my essay and critic it please? I've done about 1 page of it and I want to know if I'm going in the right direction. </p>
<p>Don't go easy on me. Trash it if you have to. I just want to make a really great essay (since it's realistically one of the few chances I have left of getting into my first choice school) </p>
<p>If you're not going to critic it, don't bother posting here. </p>
<p>Please and thank you.</p>