UIUC prompt 1 Essay. Please critique my essay!

<p>ESSAY #1: In an essay of 300 words or less, please describe how your past circumstances and experiences (such as your upbringing, community, and/or activities) impacted who you are, your future goals, and your choice of major. If you haven't decided on a college or major yet, briefly explain your intentions and aspirations for your first year at Illinois.</p>

<p>Major: Computer Science</p>

<p>I'd like to know if my understanding of computer science is correct, and if my essay effectively shows how I became interested in it.</p>

<p>PLEASE HELP!!!!</p>

<p>P.M ME PLEASE :)</p>

<p>Pleaseeeee!!!</p>

<p>I got my BSEE degrees decades ago. But I did work as a hardware, firmware as well as a software engineer before I got into management. Anyway, I dare say that I know how computers work (at a high level) probably more than any of the software or hardware engineers as I have done both. What is your question on computer science? PM me your essay and I can go over that with you.</p>

<p>I got my BSEE degrees decades ago. But I did work as a hardware, firmware as well as a software engineer before I got into management. Anyway, I dare say that I know how computers work (at a high level) probably more than any of the software or hardware engineers as I have done both. What is your question on computer science? PM me your essay and I can go over that with you.</p>

<p>cneogy and yaujar, I sent you guys my essay. Please look at it and critique it!
Thank you!</p>