UPenn Pg 217 Essay- Looking for readers

College Essays
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<p>This essay is 100% accurate, completely true, and is exactly what I want to do when I grow up. I'm not sure if I should sacrifice the truth for readability and individuality. Does anyone have any suggestions on improving this essay?</p>

<p>It's not good enough to warrant stealing, but still, if you're 09 and don't have an essay yet, you may take a few too many ideas.</p>

<p>Would anyone else like to read? I'll PM from here. I'm also going to check some other threads for help.</p>

<p>Basically, the biggest problem is the cliche aspect, and the lack of excitement. How can I fix that without losing my goal of introducing my ambitions for the future?</p>

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<p>i’ll read it</p>

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<p>I’m from 09 but I’ve already written my essay and would be happy to trade with you if that would ease fears. I’d love to read your essay. And by the way that is my common app essay, I’ve not a prayer at the Ivies.</p>

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<p>i’ll read</p>

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<p>I’m '09, but not applying to UPenn, and my essays are all written- atleast a rough draft (yay!). ALthough I was tempted to apply to UPenn just for that awesome essay topic. :)</p>

<p>PM me:)</p>

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<p>Any more? Should humor take precedence over meaning?</p>

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<p>sure ill take a look at it if you want me to. :)</p>

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<p>umm can I read please? </p>

<p>and to answer your question, I think humor should never take priority over meaning, but it can help contribute to the purpose or just tell more about what type of person you are</p>

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<p>I’m '09, but I thankfully finished my Penn app over the summer!
I’d be glad to read/critique.</p>

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<p>i’m 09 too, but I also have finished my essays, so I will be glad to read/comment yours. pm me</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look.</p>

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<p>im a 09er too… i’ve almost finished my essays… i won’t apply for UPenn… just wanna have a look at its essays >.< PM me if you want</p>

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<p>-raises hand and wants patiently- :D</p>

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<p>why is it the 217th page? does that number have significance? its a rather arbitrary number if you ask me..</p>

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<p>i’m 09 but ive already gotten in where i’m going (university of utah, full ride, financial troubles made me do it)</p>

<p>so shoot me a pm. i dont really have much to do anymore ha.</p>

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<p>Is this pg 217/300? If so, I’ve done this before and would be willing to look at yours.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it if you need an editor’s evaluation.</p>

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<p>I’ve finished my UPenn ED app, I’ll read it if you’re trusting enough.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it for you..</p>

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<p>I’ll edit it for you; PM me.</p>