<p>Hello, I'm writing an essay for University of Washington's personal statement, and the direction wants me to choose either A or B options with recommended length of 500 - 650 words. The option A states "Discuss how your family's experience or cultural history enriched you or presented you with opportunities or challenges in pursuing your educational goals." and option B states " tell us a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it."</p>
<p>well, my essay is made up of 576 words and I'm not sure which option my essay fits well into...
can you guys please help me which option my essay falls into, and can you guys also give me your honest opinion on how the essay sounds... with how to enhance my essay more fluently... thanks </p>
<p>Every since I was born, I was living a nomadic life. Always traveling to other cities with my family every four years, I have even lived in the Republic of Korea for at least four years. I loved to encounter new places, meeting variety of people who shared different customs and thus, I was thankful for all of the experiences that I had encountered while living a life as a drifter. However, the constant move from one place to another had made me feel as if I missed out on a sense of belonging to a community. As a child, I have anchored my lifes root into the rich soils of Edmonds community, becoming finely pollinated by the diversity among people that I met while growing up in the area, but after the four years of time had been flowed away, my family and I were floating away to the new world known as Bellingham just like how the winds would guide away the seed-heads of the dandelion into the new surroundings, away from the old vicinity.</p>
<pre><code> The land that I have been guided onto was known as the Bellingham. Living in Bellingham was a very pleasurable experience for me, as I attended the elementary school in Bellingham; I noticed that most of the classes had a mixture of grades. The average class sizes of the mixed grades were 20 students per class, which gave me a great opportunity to get acquainted with those from my class. I was very delighted to have friends who were in the same grades as me, and those who were a year younger than I. As I spent majority of my time mingling with the people from my school, I naturally attached myself to the friendly environment of the Bellingham. However, after the fourth year came by, the harsh wind of the reality had forcefully taken me to the new land called Lynden.
I was feeling miserable as I was forcibly taken away from my comfortable vicinage but to make things worse, I discovered that Lynden was a town made up with the majority of Dutch heritages. My first year in the middle was horrible. I was practically an outsider in the middle school as the other peers were all familiar with each other from the elementary school. The prime factor that made me feel as an outsider was of the fact that I was one of the few Asians in the town. Of course there were couple of Asians around the town, but as the one and only Asian in the whole school, I was always anxious near people.
My life completely changed when I entered high school. Attending the high school has given me a chance to do running start at the Bellinghams community college. While attending the college, I encountered my old friends from Bellingham. At first, I was too afraid of getting close them because I didnt know how to behave around people due to my isolation in Lynden, but as my old friends and I took classes together, I naturally became extroverted and began to associate with the others.
Though my struggles were isolation and the need of belonging into a community, I believe that I have experienced life in a way I believe not many other students have, and so I plan to share and spread my diverse experience amongst others, helping to create a more abundantly varied community for the University of Washington.
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