what about writting more than required?

College Essays
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<p>I am a international student applying for UC, Berkeley as a transfer student. One of their essay questions in the application form is </p>

<p>Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are? </p>

<p>I am considering to write three experiences. one is the two years preparing for National biology competition of senior high students, the regorous and scientific attitude I got. 2nd is the experience in school dancing team, and proved to my peers that I can balance between study and dancing. 3rd is one of the student representative of studies in class, being a great helper to both teachers and students. I want to say I am well rounded.</p>

<p>Is it a good idea? or, should I focus one one experience?</p>

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<p>Since they asked for one, choose the one that allows your essay to be the most personal, detailed, honest and revealing. </p>

<p>For example, I am thinking that you have good marks in science. The Admissions Committee will see that on your transcript. Your detailed response to your #2 or #3 experiences will allow your readers to realize that there is more to you than good grades, even though you never explicitly say "I am well-rounded."</p>

<p>Trying to say everything in a short essay can come across as superficial. Imo, do as they ask, pick one experience and do justice to that experience.</p>