What changes should I make

Pre-College Topics High School Life
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<p>Is my resume to long?
If it is, what should be cut out?
Anything I'm missing?</p>

<p>EDUCATION:</p>

<p>• I am currently a senior at Thomas S. Wootton High School with cumulative grade point
Average of 3.38 Unweighted and 3.65 weighted. I received a score of 1500 on the SAT; a 470 on math, a 500 on verbal and a 530 on writing. </p>

<p>AWARDS AND HONORS:</p>

<p>• 190 hours of community service</p>

<p>SCHOOL ACTIVITIES:</p>

<p>• Film Club: 11, 12
• Two years on the student newspaper: 11, 12
o One year as a staff Writer
o One year as business manager and a staff writer
• Various activities for the football team (Filming games, uploading games onto the computer, helping players get recruited) 10, 11, 12
• Coach for my graduating class in the Women’s football league (Also know as Powder-puff Football) 9, 10, 11, 12
• Referee for the student-staff basketball game series: 11, 12</p>

<p>LEADERSHIP POSITIONS:</p>

<p>• Four and a half years in B’nai Brith Youth Organization (BBYO,) As a member of the Aleph Zadik Aleph (AZA) Jewish fraternity as a member of Melech AZA #2461
• One year as chapter newspaper editor
• One year as chapter secretary
• Three years as chapter website editor
• Four years as chapter basketball and football coach</p>

<p>COMMUNITY RELATED ACTIVITIES:</p>

<p>• Two years as a CIT at a camp for kids with Tourette Syndrome
• 189 community service hours</p>

<p>ENRICHMENT ACTIVITIES:</p>

<p>• Summer Camps
o Kallah East-This was a month long experience that got me in-touch with my Judaism and my spiritual side of life
o Chapter Leadership Training Conference-This was a two week journey that taught me how to be a leader in my AZA chapter and the community</p>

<p>WORK EXPERIENCE:</p>

<p>• Ourlads NFL Scouting Services-Two years</p>

<p>Throughout my tenure with these two jobs; I have evaluated football players in the 2006, 2007 and currently the 2008 NFL Draft. My work with Ourlads has been published in the Ourlads annual draft review publication.
o Contributor to Athlon Sports Annual magazines NFL Draft preview magazine; This magazine has been featured in stores like Border and Barnes & Nobles
o One Television appearance on
o Four Radio appearances (ESPN National (The Doug Gottlieb show), ESPN Baltimore (The Anita Marks; Two times), KBZZ Reno, Nevada) When I apply I will be sending in a portfolio of my appearances
• NFL Draft Forecast (nfldraftforecast.com)-Two years
• Two years as a CIT at a Nursery School Pre-School camp
• Senior year internship with a prominent sports agency in the Washington D.C. area
• Several years of a babysitting for an autistic boy in my neighborhood</p>

<p>OTHER:</p>

<p>• I have Tourette syndrome-While in media and popular culture, it is portrayed as a negative aspect of life; Tourette syndrome has been one of the most positive influences in my life. It has been something to overcome and an aspect of my life that I shared with others with the same disorder. During the two years I spent as a CIT at a Tourette syndrome camp, I was looked up to by campers as someone who is succeeding with Tourette syndrome.</p>

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<p>Anyone????</p>

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<p>hey i was in bbyo too!!</p>

<p>anyway, what schools are you looking at? i think you should consider retaking the SAT in the fall or you should take the ACT.....but it all depends on where you're applying</p>

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<p>I'm not asking for chances, I am just asking for some help evaluating my resume</p>

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<p>There should be no full sentences in a resume. Just short, succinct bullets. No one's going to read paragraphs.</p>

<p>Also, eliminate your academic information; that appears elsewhere on your applications. (If it's not for the apps, but for some other purpose, rewrite the academic info as such:</p>

<p>EDUCATION:</p>

<p>• GPA: 3.38 uw, 3.65w. Thomas S. Wootton High School, class of 2008.
• SAT: CR 550, M 470, W 530</p>

<p>Community service is not an "honor or award" - drop it.</p>

<p>For the newspaper EC:
Student newspaper, staff reporter (11, 12), business manager (12)</p>

<p>And so on. You don't want to waste anyone's time with excess verbiage.</p>

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<p>Thanks for the suggestions</p>

<p>Any others?</p>

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<p>Interesting resume. Get your numbers up. SATs are not impressive.</p>

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<p>Kollegekid,</p>

<p>Oh do I know that all to well!</p>

<p>Any others thoughts and opinions concerning what changes I should make to my resume or thoughts in general would be appreciated</p>

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<p>Anyone else?</p>

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<p>get it down to 1 page.</p>

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<p>Is this for college or a job application? If it's for a job application, much of the info can be eliminated. </p>

<p>Take the Tourette's syndrome part out. If you want to include that info in your app, do it in your essay.</p>

<p>For colleges, exclude the info about SATs and other similar info that would be included on your college app or transcript that would be sent with it.</p>

<p>Lump together similar things such as your sports activities.</p>

<p>Get it down to one page. It's way too long</p>

<p>No reason to send a portfolio of your TV etc. appearances.</p>

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<p>Why shouldn't I send a portfolio?</p>

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<p>What parts do you guys think I should delete?</p>

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<p>are you looking for advice for applying to colleges -- or a job or something?</p>

<p>What colleges are you looking at? At most colleges, they will evaluate you based on the items required with the application -- and won't even look at the resume. It really depends on the school.</p>

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<p>I am asking what changes I should make to it to help shrink it down to one page.</p>

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<p>You've been given several suggestions. Now take your resume and give it a shot. Come back with a revised resume and we'll make additional suggestions. But don't expect other people to do your work for you.</p>

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<p>SCHOOL ACTIVITIES:</p>

<p>• Film Club: 11, 12
• Student newspaper, staff reporter (11, 12), business manager (12)
• Various activities for the football team (Filming games, uploading games, helping players get recruited) 10, 11, 12
• Coach for my graduating class in the Women’s football league: 9, 10, 11, 12
• Referee for the student-staff basketball game series: 11, 12</p>

<p>LEADERSHIP POSITIONS:</p>

<p>• Four and a half years in B’nai Brith Youth Organization (BBYO,) Member of the Aleph Zadik Aleph (AZA) Jewish fraternity as a member of Melech AZA #2461
• One year as chapter newspaper editor
• One year as chapter secretary
• Three years as chapter website editor
• Four years as chapter basketball and football coach</p>

<p>COMMUNITY RELATED ACTIVITIES:</p>

<p>• Two years as a CIT at a camp for kids with Tourette syndrome. A disorder I have
• 189 community service hours</p>

<p>ENRICHMENT ACTIVITIES:</p>

<p>• Summer Camps
o Kallah East-This was a month long experience that got me in-touch with my Judaism and my spiritual side of life
o Chapter Leadership Training Conference-This was a two week journey that taught me how to be a leader in my AZA chapter and the community</p>

<p>WORK EXPERIENCE:</p>

<p>• Ourlads NFL Scouting Services-Two years</p>

<p>Throughout my tenure with these two jobs; I have evaluated football players in the 2006, 2007 and currently the 2008 NFL Draft. My work with Ourlads has been published in the Ourlads annual draft review publication.
o Contributor to Athlon Sports Annual magazines NFL Draft preview magazine; This magazine has been featured in stores like Border and Barnes & Nobles
o One Television appearance on
o Four Radio appearances (ESPN National (The Doug Gottlieb show), ESPN Baltimore (The Anita Marks; Two times), KBZZ Reno, Nevada) When I apply I will be sending in a portfolio of my appearances
• NFL Draft Forecast (nfldraftforecast.com)-Two years
• Two years as a CIT at Nursery School Pre-School camp
• Senior year internship with a prominent sports agency in the Washington D.C. area
• Several years of a babysitting for an autistic boy in my neighborhood</p>

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<p>Should I cut out the enrichment stuff?</p>

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<p>Your enrichment and work experience sections are still rather wordy; just cut those down to the facts. No wishy washy psychology in a resume.</p>

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<p>But I don't get what I am supposed to take out from the work experience?</p>

<p>That is easily my strongest section!</p>