<p>Usually I don't comment on essays, because since i am muddling through the process of writing them myself, it would be unfair of me to pretend i know what i'm talking about. But the one sentence that really bothered me in this one was "i surely would have been in the top of my class." You can't really know that. Maybe you should say something like, my GPA would have been higher or something. lol. anyway, it was a good essay, and good luck!</p>