What do you think of my topic for the UC personal statement essay???

<p>Hello everyone!</p>

<p>Well the first essay prompt is:
Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)
Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

<p>I already wrote a rough draft for this prompt, but my topic sucks so I will need to start everything over again. My world was my family and about how my parents shaped my dreams.</p>

<p>During Feburary of this year, we had a Junior College Trip where we have an
opportunity to visit 8 different colleges and universities, including UC Berekely, UCLA, San Fransico State, CSU Long Beach, Cal Poly Obispo, UC Santa Barbara, UC Santa Cruz, and USC. Almost all the top universities in California. Well, it was truly a wonderful and educational experience. I would like to write about that for my uc personal statement essay and what I learned from that experience and how that experience will help me in the future of choosing the college of my dreams. Also, how the college trip will shaped my dreams and aspirations.</p>

<p>What do you think?? Is this a good topic to write about??
Thanks.</p>

<p>This topic can work imo if it allows for a personal, detailed, revealing essay that gives insight into your whole personality.</p>