<p>I would give it a 6. The examples were vague and it was pretty short. The example with the firemen was ok, but not that good. Your own example was definitely better, but i wish it had more specifics. Also, it would have been nice if you had told what your own concience was sayig to you. The firemen example was very broad and it seemed like you were trying to get points using the firemen in a sentimental, patriotic way.</p>
<p>Anyway, a literary example would be better for this type of essay and you should elaborate your personal experience.</p>