<p>It's for a scholarship essay. I brainstormed a bit last night and here's what I came up with:</p>
<p>The window separates me from the world.</p>
<p>My peach tree had depression.</p>
<p>The ducks—they're laughing at me.</p>
<p>I always carry an extra pencil.</p>
<p>Coffee makes me sleepy.</p>
<p>Whenever we made eye contact, it'd growl at me. I miss my neighbor's dog.</p>
<p>The first sentence does not stand alone, but rather connects to and foreshadows the rest of the essay. </p>
<p>Only someone who can read the entire essay, such as you, can decide which first sentence best serves your overall intention.</p>
<p>i like them all. but like Adad said, we cannot determine which sentence would be best for you. we need to know what you will be writing about. </p>
<p>all these sentences seem like they’ll lead to different topics tho. have you thought of what you want to say in the essay?</p>
<p>all of them are just so intriguing…</p>
<p>I agree that one would have to know what follows to definitively decide, but judging based on which most makes me want to continue reading, I’d say #2 or #3.</p>
<p>Try this: “The ducks in my depressed peach tree laugh at me as I look out my window.” :-)</p>
<p>Seriously, I’d suggest: “I miss my neighbor’s dog.” That opens a big door for humor and possibly some touching anecdotes.</p>
<p>I agree with everyone who said that it would help to know what the context of the essay was, but based purely on whether or not it grabs your attention, I thought that - “The ducksthey’re laughing at me.” and “Coffee makes me sleepy.” - were the most intriguing. Although, all of the sentences were great, in all honesty.</p>