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<p>BTW, my prompt was:
A colleague of the great scientist James Watson remarked that Watson was always "lounging around, arguing about problems instead of doing experiments." He concluded that "There is more than one way of doing good science." It was Watson's form of idleness, the scientist went on to say, that allowed him to solve "the greatest of all biological problems: the discovery of the structure of DNA." It is a point worth remembering in a society overly concerned with efficiency.</p>
<p>Adapted from John C. Polanyi, "Understanding Discovery"</p>
<p>Assignment:</p>
<p>Do people accomplish more when they are allowed to do things in their own way? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>thanks chunlin!
i think that topic is so hard...
i got a different one... anyways, thanks a lot</p>
<p>Really?
Looking at the other prompts, I was glad that I got this one. Well, to each their own...</p>
<p>chunlin66:</p>
<p>You have a pretty cool handwriting. :)</p>
<p>thanks. i like how you threw in the word "plethora" at the end =)
did you write non-stop?</p>
<p>chunlin66- that's not a 12, its a 13+ haha</p>
<p>great essay.</p>
<p>I hope you will post your Level 12 essay on the Sample Level 12 Essay thread. Congratulations on your score!!</p>
<p>I perhaps took a minute to think of supports and jot down a couple of ideas, but after that, I wrote nonstop.</p>
<p>ok, yeah. Length is the most important factor. Remember that the test-scorer only takes 30 seconds to scan through each essay. They want to see SAT vocab, length, a good intro and conclusion. You can make up as many examples as you can (they are not going to check!)</p>
<p>This essay, by my friend, was written a while ago. Although he claims it earned a score of 12, I hardly believe so. What do you guys think?</p>
<p>"We thought that he was everything
To make us wish that we were in his place."
These words from Edwin Arlington Robinson's famous poem "Richard Cory" describe what people often feel when they see others who apparently lead happier, richer, and more content lives than they do.
The kind of envy to which Robinson refers may serve as a strong motivating force for some people to improve their condition and place in life. On the other hand, envy may also be a self-devastating and ultimately frustrating emotion because it was lead people to strive in vain for unattainable goals. In your view is envy generally a positive or a negative force in people's lives? Please use evidence from your studies, you reading and your personal observation to support your opinion.</p>
<p>Envy is ultimately a veil for corruption. When overcome with a gripping desire for someone else's fortunes, individuals can often forsake moral principles for selfish needs. Although some might argue that envy serves as a driving force for progress, more often than not jealous individuals too obsessed and passionate in attaining benefits overlook the necessities of others and develop a rather egotistical frame of mind that can turn out to be deleterious to all.</p>
<p>The tainting qualities of envy is perhaps most vividly illustrated in Shakespeare's Julius Caesar. Although some members of the conspiracy against Caesar, such as Brutus, were impelled by noble means, others, such as Cassius plotted the ruler's death because of intense envy towards the luxurious and glorious life enjoyed by the ambitious dictator-to-be. Interestingly, it was this envy that formed the conspiracy in the first place. Cassius, eager to see the disastrous fall of the mighty Caesar, was the first individual to mention an assassination of the potentate. Had it not been for Cassius venomous yet toxically cogent words, Brutus would not have renounced loyalty to his ruler. However, Brutus, as malleable as dough, fell into Cassius plan, whose envious drive was thinly concealed by the purported noble purpose of freeing Rome and its citizens from a terrible potentate. Envy, in this case, ultimately contributed to Caesar's tragic death, and later to the death of Brutus, who in later combat with Octavius, killed himself to avoid being captured by the enemy.</p>
<p>On a larger scale, the feeling of envy is even more perverse. In fact, it is strong enough to induce people into violence and bloodshed. One of the main factors contributing to the Russian communism revolution was the discontent and envy of the poor towards the aristocracy, which wallowed in comfort and pleasure. Long before the actual revolution broke out, farmers, factory workers were already incubating jealousy in their hearts as they saw that landlords and factory owners acquired an unfairly large portion of the profits so arduously produced by their own sweat. Once this jealousy reached its zenith, strong violent emotions burst forth in the form of a major and bloody overhaul of the economic and social system. During the revolution, countless individuals were killed as the lower class let anger and vindictiveness cloud their morals and virtues. In the end, the envy harbored by these poor classes inflicted more harm than it did good, as the Russian socio-economic conditions were crippled for years to come.</p>
<p>Essentially, the feeling of envy is to be avoided when necessary. It often brings forth the most vile qualities in human nature because people in the state of envy often confuse the rights and wrongs.</p>
<p>"You can make up examples for the essay. You can say that Shakespeare is still alive. Just remember that..." </p>
<p>r u serious? I thought they had to be valid. So, you mean I can make up a book where certain things happen that supports my thesis?</p>
<p>you could, but remember: colleges can access your essay when you apply, so they can actually check your sources. So if you cant think of an example, make up a personal experience</p>
<p>well they do that very rarely, in cases where the application essay is exceptional and the SAT essays have consistently been crap.</p>
<p>Went from a 6 to a 12.</p>
<p>They base it on length? Pure, unadulterated, physical length? Not even wordcount? That's ridiculous. My handwriting seriously lacks horizontal length, for whatever reason. Damn College Board...</p>
<p>I got a 12. I say:
1. A two or three sentence introduction (keep it short)
2. One historical example (if you don't have one, make it up)
3. One personal example (again, make it up)
4. Close with two strong sentences.</p>
<p>Make sure you fill up all of the space, otherwise, it's a lost cause. If you are having trouble, then write bigger and put more space in between your words. That's what I do.</p>
<p>YOur daughter is a writing gineus and a gifted writer then...be proud of her...i wish my parents got online to look at all the tests and college stuff...but noooooooo i'm the one convincing them that volunteering and sat and aps are important...oh life</p>
<p>i belive he got a 12...nice analysis of the russian revolution...keyword ANALYSIS!!! that;s what greaters want...and length probably does count since graders have to grade like millions of essays
GOOD LUCK KIDS</p>
