<p>read my essay? It's about death, a popular literary work, and my experiences with them. It's a little crude and awkward in just a few spots, but it's well on its way (I think).</p>
<p>As this is my first college essay, I am open to any constructive criticism, grammar lessons, or anything in general haha</p>
<p>Thanks</p>
<p>Send it to me. I will advise you. Me ? a NY high school teacher.</p>
<p>bump.... i'd appreciate just a few more inputs</p>
<p>i'm up for it if you want more help :)</p>
<p>I have read your essay ! You are such a wonderful reader as well as a writer. If I were an adcom, that was the impression I have from the essay. The them of growing up with the Potter series is well developed. But,,,,, you need to concentrate more on your revelations and on how the books influenced you to be a 'better' teen. This is what the adcoms are looking for.</p>