Why do they always hate my essays?

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<p>@Poseur</p>

<p>That’s pretty funny! :stuck_out_tongue: </p>

<p>@Liist</p>

<p>I don’t think amazing examples are really necessary, I just used 3 personal examples and 2 “a friend” examples. They have to be decent, but they don’t have to be outstanding. I’ve used 3 great examples and recieved a 12. YMMV.</p>

<p>@MelancholyDane</p>

<p>To a degree. Your spelling has to be pretty good, and your grammar not a disaster. They like Intro->Bodies->Conclusion that are clearly defined</p>

<p>@kelsmom</p>

<p>I pretty much have the intro canned. It starts out with the question of the prompt, presents the viewpoint I’m refuting, and then the one I agree with. I agree with it for X reason.</p>

<p>Example (for fun, obviously not a real essay :stuck_out_tongue: ) :
Chocolate chip cookies are delicious. and their goodness brings happiness to children. Yet some argue that their fat and sugar will be the bane of humanity. Are chocolate chip cookies evil?</p>

<p>Are chocolate cookies truly evil? Some argue that chocolate chip cookies are definitely evil, since they contain fat and typically have high sugar content. Others contend that chocolate chip cookies are delicious and portable treats that bring happiness to many. I believe that chocolate chip cookies are not evil. This viewpoint is supported by my own experience eating chocolate chip cookies since a young age, obesity studies by the Food and Drug Administration*<em>, the experience of my friend who eats a box of Chips Ahoy every day and wins marathons</em>, and nutritional studies on chocolate chip cookies by the European Union***.*</p>

<p>*****: Fictional examples made up within the timespan of two minutes.</p>

<p>Alright below is my essay for the November 2007 SAT. I got an 11 on it and typed it with all of my grammatical errors, if any, in there. I wrote a little more than 1.5 pages and didn’t get to the conclusion.</p>

<p>Having a large number of options to choose from does not in fact make people very happy. Just because certain people are more better off than others and because of this have more things available to them, doesn’t make them enjoy life anymore than any other person. This can be seen in the movies such as Tuesdays with Morrie, in literature, and in the world of sports.
First, just because people have many options doesn’t necessarily make them happy. In the movie Tuesdays with Morrie, Mitch Album, a famous and wealthy sports writer that lives in Detriot has everything available to him. He has a good job and a gorgeous girl friend, and is very well off. Yet, he still isn’t happy. His relationship isn’t going as well as he would have hoped and his job is taking up most of his life. He reconnects with his old professor Morrie, who is terminally ill with ALS and they talk about life together every Tuesday. Morrie helps put Mitch’s life back on tack and gives him the lesson of what is most important in life: friends and family, not material goods and such.<br>
Next, in a Walk in the Woods by Bill Bryson, Bill and Stephen Katz, one of his friends, go on a 5 month trip through the Appalachian Mountains. For this trip to happen, they had to cut back on the amount of items they were taking such as food and clothing because that would be the weight they would have to carry on their backs for the duration of the trip. Together, they started in Georgia and experienced all the elements Mother Nature had to offer as they made their way up to Maine. Even without all of their options such as food and clothing to choose from, they still enjoyed themselves for a 5 month period. During this period, they were limited with all of their options. They knew they would have to sleep in the same tent every night, wear virtually the same clothing that they did a few days back, eat the same meals day in and day out, and shower only on occasion. All the things that we humans take for granted were removed from their lives and they couldn’t enjoy it anymore than they did. They still had eachother.
Third, in sports today, baseball in particular, athletes are given many options to choose from but are still not happy. Alex Rodriguez, former third baseman of the New York Yankees just decided to opt out of a $252 million dollar contract with the Yankees to pursue more money. Some experts believe the bidding for his services will start at $350 million dollars. Some people. ,myself included, think this number is an absurd amount of money to pay a person who does nothing but hit a baseball four hundred feet. Alex Rodriguez, however, and many athletes similar to him buy huge houses, cars, and televisions, yet want more and more at the same time. They can never be happy no matter how much they have.</p>

<p>I’ve gotten an 11 both times I took the SAT I. It’s not hard, and what they want to see is this:</p>

<p>Intro, example from literature, example from real-life, personal example, conclusion.</p>

<p>Follow that formula, elaborate a bit, throw in a few very verbally pleasing flowery phrases, and there you have it.</p>

<p>Oh, and it’s always good to make a profound statement at the end.</p>

<p>I can type up some of my essays for you too, if you wanna see them.</p>

<p>Is identity something people are born with or given, or is it something people create for themselves? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>A simple glance around the crowded facility I am currently sitting in renders a flood of images into my mind. If we speak of identities, my current location is not insufficient in provision. Many students, all ambitious and hopeful, come together to create a conglomeration of identities.</p>

<p>Each one of us, no matter the race, age, or gender, is born into a certain identity. Each has his or her own physical appearance and stereotypical composure. However, identity in the truest sense is one that we create for ourselves; an opportunity to transcend the identity with which we are born.</p>

<p>There are many examples of this in literature both old and new. For example, in the classic Jane Eyre, Jane is raised as a timid girl, shadowed by her cousins and villifying aunt, only to be sent away to boarding school, where uniformity was encouraged and free-flying ideas scorned. Had Jane simply decided to adhere to this “identity” shoved upon her, she would not have been able to grow and mature as a person. Thankfully for Jane, she decided to break free of this norm and embark on her own search for understanding and identity, eventually changing her views and morphing into a grown woman worth of the elusive title of a classic heroine.</p>

<p>Modern literature is not scarce in example either. In a novel titled Scribbler of Dreams, Kate’s identity is that of a Malone, the family that the Crutchfilds, their distant relatives, despite with all the loathing worth of generations upon generations of malice between the two. Much to Kate’s dismay, she finds herself in love wiht Bram Crutchfield. Family squabbles have lent prejudice to Bram’s faction, however, and Kate’s single struggle is to break free of the typical Malone identity and show Bram that he should love her for who she really is. Through a series of events, Kate learns important lessons that developer her own new character and identity by allowing herself to expand beyond what was “expected” of a Malone, to learn to love an enemy, and to further her own morals and beliefs. All these pieces create hte “new” Kate that can be viewed ultimately with admiration and reverence.</p>

<p>As a Chinese-american, I too was born into a community that only seemed to know how to assign identities as if passing out uniforms. “You are expected to be a great virtuoso.” “You will excel in mathematics.” Tired of being restrained to these typical activities and personalities, I created my own inventory of ideals and interests. Perhaps I may not be the perfect fit to the generic mold from which I was birthed - my grades are less-than-perfect and I do not win national piano competitions - but I am proud that I was able to take my life into my own artisan hands and shape my own life by instigating memorable experiences, making choices for what I truly believe in, being ambitious, and most of all, for learning that identities are something that we can all break free of, to don our own handmade wings - gathered from experiences, trial, error, and success - and soar to the place we know we belong.</p>

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<p>I write in cursive, so that allowed me to get a lot down in the 25 minutes.
Also, despite what they tell you about outlining and prewriting, don’t worry about that. It only wastes time. Take about 20 seconds tops coming up with THREE examples and then just write like the wind. Don’t stop to think or erase. Just cross it out and continue scribbling on. Practice getting that constant stream of information flowing, and pretty soon with the help of the introduction + literary example + real life example + personal example + conclusion equation, you’ll be getting top scores as well! I know you’ve all got it in you, so best of luck from an ex-SAT tester! (Yep, today was my last time! YESSSS.)</p>

<p>Vivi: I read
“Oh, and it’s always good to make a profound statement at the end.”
as
“Oh, and it’s always good to make a PROFANE statement at the end.”</p>

<p>lawls.</p>

<p>ROFL. I wonder what score you’d get if you wrote a superb essay but then did that at the end O_o</p>

<p>Writes down: “Took a risk.”</p>

<p><em>Boosts from 11 to 12.</em> = )</p>

<p>Haha, I must say you have a good point there ;D</p>

<p>yawn. don’t bother with the writing component. most schools think its a joke in itself. 25 minutes is rubbish. </p>

<p>write a fantastic college essay instead.</p>

<p>I got a 9 and an 8, respectively. However, the 8 essay was much better than the 9 essay: more concise, more elaborate, etc. As you can tell, I don’t think highly of this section. ;)</p>

<p>-Tips for getting a high SAT essay score-</p>

<ol>
<li><p>Don’t write earnestly. That is, if you’re writing like what a 12 would get then that’s probably a bad thing. A friend of mine who wrote a 12 SAT essay wrote a similar essay in college and got a D.</p></li>
<li><p>Be lengthy. Seriously, use glaringly bookish transition phrases like “to be sure” when you can and use large vocabulary whenever the opportunity presents itself. If you’re thinking about using the completely understandable “rarely,” use “seldom” instead. </p></li>
<li><p>If you can find the time to implement literary techniques without sounding incredibly pretentious, do so; remember, being viewed as pretentious by SAT essay graders is akin to being viewed as burly by Russian prison inmates.</p></li>
<li><p>Read “Politics and the English Language” by Orwell and do the opposite of what he says to do. ;)</p></li>
<li><p>Get a good MC score! Seriously, I got an 80, which, with an 8 essay, gave me a 770–still a very good score. Getting an 80 is surprisingly easy because you use English on a daily basis, so implementing SAT writing grammar and noticing errors becomes natural. Buy “Grammar Workbook for the SAT, ACT, and more…,” it’s a very effective book.</p></li>
</ol>

<p>leave it blank. or scribble hieroglyphics. :)</p>