"Why Duke" essay is one paragraph too long

<p>It's currently 3 solid paragraphs. I know the supplement only asks for 1-2 paragraphs and that it's an optional essay, but I feel like these three points are truly what makes Duke such a good match for me. I honestly can't decide which paragraph to cut out. :(</p>

<p>If anyone is willing, could you please read over my essay and critique it? (and maybe decide which paragraph should go? No '14ers please, and preferably Duke students/alumni) My stats are average so I really want my essay to stand out.</p>

<p>I posted the same topic in the Duke thread.</p>