<p>What do colleges look for in your response to this question and other supplements. </p>
<p>this is mine for NYU. How does it look? Thanks</p>
<p>I may have been raised in the country, but I am a city girl at heart. Specifically New York City. When I am in the city, I feel absolutely inspired by the immense culture it carries. Also, the opportunities in the city are endless, especially for a person seeking a career in the arts. NYU being located in the city, makes it the ideal school for me. One of the main reasons I love NYU is its focus on intellectual intelligences as well as artistic intelligences. I believe it is very important to be a well rounded person and take math and science courses along with art courses. Many art schools that I have looked into do not offer a program quite like NYU's program. I have visited NYU a few times, and I can sincerely say, I feel like I belong. I can see myself at NYU. It is my dream school</p>
<p>Replace “NYU” with the name of any big city university. Does the paragraph still make total and complete sense? If it does, then you have some work to do.
You need to tell them WHY NYU. What SPECIFICALLY about this school sparks your interest? And instead of telling them why, try try to show them why.
Maybe write a short story about why art is important to you and then relate it to their arts program.</p>
<p>Honestly, I like your answer. I think your focus on New York City is good. There really aren’t that many great schools in NYC. Columbia is the only other one that comes to mind. So, pointing this out does provide a very valid reason for NY. You also point out that NYU is a University (which offers a broad course offering) as opposed to many art schools which are don’t offer this opportunity.</p>
<p>Finally, you hit on the intangible – you feel like you belong (and you’ve visited more than once). </p>
<p>I don’t think that the essay has to read that this school is special and unique (especially if you’re not applying early decision). It has to make sense, and yours does.</p>
<p>However, if you could add something specific about NYU it wouldn’t hurt – for example, did you visit any classes? “Professor Xavier’s class in Art History was fascinating, and I was immediately able to apply what I learned when I visited the Metropolitan Museum of Art later in the day.” (this is especially good if you sent Prof X an email thanking him after you attended the class) or “One of the reasons that I felt at home was the tour guide Lois Lane – she presented an excellent picture of the school.” (this shows that you at least paid attention during the tour). You don’t need a lot, here, but something would help.</p>