<p>One of their essays simply ask why you'd like to attend Northwestern. Do you have talk about ur academic interests that you'll pursue at NU? Or is it just less serious things like maybe being active in a club, or Chicago is very appealing, etc.?? What did you guys think of this?</p>
<p>Thanks</p>
<p>I don't know, putting down that i want to attend NU b/c of its great location and a has close-community knit with enormous school spirit a likely reason to choose it? Or should i put that its biological sciences is very good and that i want to continue research in the cerebellum that i did in high school? maybe i should jus put both, somehow...</p>
<p>This essay is really your [last] chance to prove to the school that you are a good fit. Remember, they want to make sure you will be happy here and will fit in well with the school's personality. </p>
<p>I was a pretty good fit all around for NW last year, but I wouldn't say my scores were way up there. So I knew this essay was especially important. I stressed a couple of things that NW admissions seem to like. First, They are very very proud of Chicago. The city is one of their big "hooks." I would definatley mention the school's location and why that appeals to you. Chicago is a big part of the school's culture. </p>
<p>I also wouldn't use this essay to list off your resume again, but its the right place to tie it all together. BE HONEST. Is it that you are really really excitied about their new bio facilities? Or is it that you are most excited about Big Ten sports. (Both are equally fine in my mind). The last thing I might mention is something I have found as a freshman. If you end up at NU you will become friends with the most talented, smart, fun, energetic, and motivated people you have ever met. Your peers will bring out the best in you. You can't find that at too many other schools.</p>
<p>hope this helps, just be honest, they can tell.
-NWern08</p>
<p>The admissions office knows all about NU. The why NU is about you. Like the post above said this is your chance to make a connection between you and NU.</p>
<p>Thanks, I wrote about my interest in their neurobiology dept.
Can you please crititque it? </p>
<p>You can find it on this link:
<a href="http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=20381%5B/url%5D">http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=20381</a></p>
<p>Thanks</p>
<p>i think i'll just post up my second essay:</p>
<p>After a typical day of running errands and fixing computers at the International Institute, Bernie Kunos, the educational director, called me into her office for a request. The intern teacher for the ESL computer class failed to show up, so Bernie asked me to substitute for a day. The class focused on basic computer skills such as opening and using applications. The computer class had fifteen old Compaqs without internet connection. Microsoft Office and various typing programs were installed on each of the computers.<br>
I eagerly took the temporary post. </p>
<p>Upon entering class, I noticed only three students present. A Liberian woman, a Venezuelan woman, and a Japanese man all waited patiently for my instructions. After introducing myself, I allowed the students to type their goals for the class using Microsoft Word. While her two classmates were busy using Word, the Liberian woman fidgeted with mouse, not knowing how to use it. She stared into the screen with puzzlement. I later learned that she had never even seen a computer. Even handling a mouse, something I took for granted, was a completely alien process to the student. </p>
<pre><code>The following and subsequent days, the intern teacher still failed to come, and I was replaced as the substitute teacher for the rest of the summer. The class was held two days a week. I continued to teach the three students on basic usage of computers. The Liberian woman especially became more proficient. Once she saw her progress in the class, she asked Mrs. Kunos to enroll her family and relatives. The Liberian woman and her family were refugees who emigrated from Liberia just a few weeks before. Soon the class consisted of twelve students. Mrs. Kunos went on to fill the class with a Somali refugee couple and a Burmese man, who was a prisoner-of-war.
The big group of students made for a lively class session. Everyone had a good time by putting their differences away and helping each other in the learning process. I worked individually with each student, since everyone had a different skill level. For the beginners, I introduced the parts of the computer and allowed them to practice using the mouse. Soon, the class was able to open and use applications such as Word and various typing programs. I loved it when the students shrieked in amazement when they saw a paper being printed out. I can never forget their look of wonder when documents were printed. When students learn something new, I occasionally heard, Excellent, I didnt know you could do that.
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<p>One day, while I was walking to my car, a woman came running towards me. I frantically asked her if something was wrong, but her only reply was, Thank you again, you are so much help. On the drive home, I thought about the parking lot incident. Suddenly a huge smile appeared on my face as I came to a realization: I, for the first time, directly made a positive difference in the lives of fifteen people. Even though I had previously volunteered at the hospital and had tutored classmates, the gratification I received from teaching the group of people at the institute was greater. Such a small deed had a profound effect on the students. </p>
<p>Please I need your help</p>
<p>Thanks.</p>
<p>I personally like it. It's the butterfly effect one right? The only thing I saw was in the second paragraph: While her two classmates were busy using Word, the Liberian woman fidgeted with [the] mouse</p>
<p>Thanks, should i elaborate on anything, and do I have to give more personal thoughts?? Please critique as hard as you can, you can be harsh. </p>
<p>Thanks</p>
<p>You are the subject of the first part of the first sentence, yes? I initially had a tough time distinguishing that. In retrospect, I think it's obvious that an educational director wouldn't be fixing computers at the International Institute, but it may do you good to look into a rewording. But what do I know!</p>