<p>There are a couple of innuendos, but I can't decide if I need to tone it down or not. I'd really appreciate it if someone would be kind enough to glance at it and give a quick opinion. You might get a chuckle out of it :P</p>
<p>[I wasn't sure if I should post this here or in College Essays - it seemed like the Rice forum would know more about Rice]</p>
<p>I would love to read it. You have definitely sparked my interest. haha.</p>
<p>I’m just curious. What kind of innuendo?</p>
<p>Well… the sexual kind?
Oh jeez, that makes it sound really bad.
I basically said Rice would be great for a one night stand (since the campus is gorgeous and the university has an “impressive reputation” for pleasing (and this is where the innuendos come in)), but even better as a lifelong commitment (and then talked about specifics which gave the college a “personality”). It kind of made sense at the time.</p>
<p>I PMed it to you RiceOwlHopeful - thanks for offering to help!</p>
<p>I’d never write something like that on anything important. JSYK.</p>
<p>Depending on the execution, that could work. PM it to me and I’ll give you some feedback.</p>
<p>I agree with Owl. There are certainly much safer way to approach this. Unless you don’t care to get admitted!</p>
<p>Thanks, I PMed it NYSkins :)</p>
<p>I’ve thought about it, and unless NYSkins replies with, “NO! ABSOLUTELY NOT!” I probably will submit it. It’s not that I don’t care about being admitted. But after RiceOwl’s feedback (neutral opinion), I’ve come to the conclusion that if I am not admitted simply for my Why Rice essay, then perhaps Rice isn’t the best fit. I don’t think the essay is very obscene. It’s a little subtle and a little risky. But not something that should be automatic rejection worthy, in my opinion.</p>
<p>Thanks for your input, though. I still have about 23 hours left to submit, maybe I’ll sleep on it and my subconscious will talk me into rewriting.</p>
<p>I actually agree with you. I don’t know what it says exactly, but it sounds like something that readers would find unique. It’s a good chance for you to pop out and be remembered, even if it is as “that one essay that compared Rice to a risky woman.” :P</p>
<p>However,your post about comparing a one night stand and a lifelong commitment is intriguing and I think you should somehow incorporate that into your essay. That way, they can understand your insight better.</p>
<p>Best of luck!</p>
<p>^ Do you mean incorporate it into my Why Rice essay? That was essentially the basis of my Why Rice essay 
Sorry if I wasn’t clear. If you mean incorporating it into the perspective essay… well, I’ve already written that one and it wouldn’t make sense if I squeezed in a sentence about one night stands ;)</p>
<p>I want to thank everyone for their input. I made some revisions using suggestions from NYSkins, though the essay still stands on the same foundation. I’ve officially submitted it with innuendos intact, so I guess all that’s left to do is wait for regret to sink in at precisely 12:01 :p</p>
<p>Might I read this for my own edification? This sounds very interesting. Depending on the execution, it could be marvelous…or you could crash and burn.</p>
<p>It also depends on whose desk your essay lands on 
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<p>Oh well. Gotta take risks in life!</p>
<p>You could PM it to me as well. I have to say, I don’t think I have the guts to try something like this, but it will make you stand out (in a good way, if done well)</p>
<p>I PMed it to you both.
I nearly posted it in the thread, since the RD deadline has passed, but decided not to on the off chance than an admissions officer googles my essay 
I’ll post it after decisions if anyone still cares in four months.</p>
<p>I liked it a lot. It showed wit, although the last sentence kinda clunked a little.</p>
<p>I enjoyed it as well. Definitely stands out against everything I have seen before. I think it was witty and ‘out-of-the-box’.</p>
<p>Well in line with ‘Unconventional Wisdom’. Hopefully the admissions dept. will see it the same way. Good Luck!</p>
<p>It really depends on whose desk it lands on. Most people in admissions are going to love that, but a few of them might not be as wild about it.</p>
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<p>That’s true, especially if it lands into some very conservative hands. Being Texas, it wouldn’t be all that surprising…</p>
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<p>Rice isn’t that conservative, despite location. But yes, it does depend on personal taste. Although essays are probably read by multiple people, to avoid personal prejudices?</p>
<p>Haha, I understand where the assumption came from. Despite living in Texas nearly my entire life, I used to think UT-Austin was conservative until about two years ago…</p>
<p>Tilgaham and Antarius - Thank you for your comments. I’m not nearly as worried about my essay now as I was when I was submitting it.
This little seed of hope is a lot nicer than the inferiority complex I usually develop from reading CC ;)</p>
<p>Ha, I could be wrong…although crusty, fifty year old admissions officers do exist. Rice students are definitely more interesting, on average, than students at a peer school… maybe your essay is exactly what they’re looking for. I remember reading on here that someone wrote their Rice essay on wanting to have kids with the university or something like that, so they’ve probably seen a lot of eccentric stuff. I hope you get it.</p>