<p>I was recently rejected ED from Penn and because Swarthmore was my second choice behind Penn, I have decided to apply Winter ED. Swarthmore can offer me the academic and social experience necessary for me to flourish as an undergraduate, making it my top choice at the moment. I already wrote my Why Swarthmore essay and was wondering if any current students or parents of current students would be willing to read it. I will not send it to anyone applying for Fall 2011 admission (or anyone younger). I am worried about not including enough details about Swarthmore...I really want to maintain flow in my essay. Any help is greatly appreciated! Thank you for your time! :)</p>
<p>“Swarthmore can offer me the academic and social experience necessary for me to flourish as an undergraduate, making it my top choice at the moment.”</p>
<p>My only advice is to make sure that you don’t say this kind of assertion in your essay, because it means absolutely nothing. (Which doesn’t mean that you won’t get in with this kind of essay, but it won’t help you.)</p>
<p>I am curious about ED 1 to Penn and now ED 2 to Swat. Other than being in the same geographical region, they’re very different places.</p>
<p>I was accepted ED I…Care to send it over to me?</p>
<p>I agree; saying that in a college admissions essay would be undesirable.</p>
<p>Penn honestly wasn’t the right fit for me and I think the admissions officers saw that. I enjoy intellectual conversations with friends and I have a genuine ardor for learning. I wouldn’t be able to find a bunch of kids like that at Penn as much as at Swarthmore. The only reasons I applied ED to Penn was because of the Jerome Fisher Program and my father really wanted me to go there. So Penn was more like my father’s top choice. Penn is less intellectual and quirky than Swat, and I really like that. I believe I was able to convey my passion for Swat in my essay. I’m not going to list all of the things I like about Swat here, as that would be pointless. I hope I was, however, able to illustrate (at least to some degree) why I am applying ED II to Swarthmor</p>
<p>Bump. Any current Swatties or parents willing to read it?</p>
<p>My son just got accepted ED to Swarthmore and I helped go over his essays. If you still need help, send it over.</p>
<p>Addendum: Okay who would want a grammar flunky to go over their essay? I meant “If you are still in need of a second . . .”</p>
<p>This essay is very important. You might as well make it the best that you can.</p>
<p>I was accepted EDI. You may sent it to me!</p>
<p>current swattie. will read and comment if you so wish.</p>