<p>I would like critiques / any advice :D</p>
<p>I wouldnt mind provided you PM it to me.</p>
<p>sent. anyone else? i promise it’s worth your time.</p>
<p>i can read it as well, and will give you my comments</p>
<p>sent! 
100000</p>
<p>I would like critiques / any advice :D</p>
<p>I wouldnt mind provided you PM it to me.</p>
<p>sent. anyone else? i promise it’s worth your time.</p>
<p>i can read it as well, and will give you my comments</p>
<p>sent! 100000</p>