Will someone critique my college application essay?

<p>Preferably someone who is not also applying to colleges this year, just to be safe. Would anyone be will to read my essay and give me some feedback? Firstly, is it a good topic? Did the first paragraph catch your attention and make you want to continue reading? Does it tell you things about me? If you're up for it I can email it to you. Thanks in advance :)</p>

<p>Yes I’ll read it. PM me.</p>