Will someone read my Common App essay?

<p>I have procrastinated too much and I just wrote my common app (really late :((). Thankfully, most of my supplementals are completed. So, I was wondering if someone could critique it, suggest improvements, tell me if it makes sense?? thanks so much, i can read your essays if you want!!!! I chose the first prompt btw</p>

<p>I can read it</p>

<p>Thanks so much i just wrote it an im not that great of a writer, but should i message it to you? im still trying to figure out how this website works</p>

<p>@ChrisisGunnaWalk ^^^^^^</p>

<p>Yes just copy and paste it</p>

<p>I’ll read! I’m a writer, so I should have some useful feedback.</p>

<p>I can read it if you want! I’ve already applied to all of my schools :)</p>