<p>Assess the validity of the statement:</p>
<p>"A black slave in the south was better off than a wage worker in the north."</p>
<p>For my essay, I chose to disagree with this quote.</p>
<p>Between 1800 and 1860, small farmers and slaveowning planters migrated westward and brought new territory under cultivation. As human labor, both voluntary and coerced, built a vastly larger slaveholding society, farms and plantations spread across the landscape. Both black slaves in the south and wage workers in the north had their differences in terms of life. Wage workers, not black slaves, had better lives for the North's manufacturing industry was growing rapidly and was ameliorating the the North's economy.</p>
<p>Can anyone help me fix this introduction up to make it strong? In my body paragraphs, I will be discussing how the black slaves often get beaten and had to resist slavery. They did not like their masters, and therefore, had to kill them according to Nat Turner's rebellion. For the wage workers in the north, I will be talking about how they are contributing to the growth of the region by working in the factories to mass-produce products. With this in mind, will my INTRO suffice?</p>
<p>Can anyone help me? :(</p>
<p>My USHAP teacher knows people who grade the essays and the format shoud be: 3 sentences in the first paragraph (the first should be introducing the thesis; the second should be an organization statement- in other words, just say first this happened second this happened, etc., or you can just make a good sentence of two about general themes you are going to talk about, or even mention the main terms you are going to cover and then analyze them in the rest of the essay- this is actually a good idea becayse then you give all you evidence in the first paragrph and the grader knows what you are talking about- by the way, they grade these things in 15 seconds so you need some evidence to support your position in the first paragraph!!; and then the third (or maybe it's the fourth) sentence of the first paragraph is the thesis. </p>
<p>Your thesis really impacts your grade, as does your evidence- you do want the thesis to be complex and good, but don't get too fluffy and use too many big words- it won't get extra points UNLESS you ALSO include good evidence and facts, and make sure you include the ERA in the thesis- (but of course do NOT EVER restate the time period given in the prompt/question!) -BTW, using a theis beginning with although is supposed to get good points; also, if you can conclude your essay by tying it to some current event, that is also extra points</p>
<p>"black wage workers" restates the prompt
THESIS??? Although Northern industrial workers encountered a significant degree of substandard conditions in pre-Civil War society, the excellerating opportunity provided by an improving economy and manufacturing surpassed Southern slave conditions characterized by (racism?) and (...).</p>