Would anybody care to edit my essay?

Applying to College
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<p>post and i'll send it to you</p>

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<p>I'll do it.</p>

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<p>I enjoyed the first and second one very much. You can cut down the second one by getting rid of the paragraph where you talked about preparing in the morning/packing. It's not that important. You should focus on your feelings afterward.
I thought the third one was sort of weak compared to the other two. You might want to redo it as it becomes boring after the third sentence. The words "motivation" and whatnot don't really mean anything in statments unless you truly show it. In that one, it just seemed like it was stuck in there for effect.
Other than that, I liked it.</p>

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<p>pm me and I'll look at it.</p>

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<p>i'll look at it if you would like.</p>

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<p>Beast, thanks for reading it. Do you have any comments on it grammatically or on its punctuation.</p>

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<p>You are missing a "am" in the first one. It is the last paragraph.
I didn't pay too much attention to grammar as it probably won't matter much. Just proofread a couple of times.</p>

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<p>i'll read it</p>

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<p>i'd like to read it</p>

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<p>pm me if ya still need any input</p>

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<p>I would like a couple more inputs. But I would prefer it if all your post weren't asking for essays</p>

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<ol>
<li>i liked this one a lot, but I want to know why you suddenly had the spark...it got easier, you had an inspirational teacher, what? And lifetime is one word. UC essay formatting online won't let you use accents, by the way, so you can't use lecci</li>
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<p>The answer to the riflery question is that we have scopes to check out the shots. But since there are 60 shots in a match, most people dont keep track of the total score as they go. </p>

<p>Im also thinking about changing the third essay. Maybe i'll write about the summer that I volunteered at a senior center.</p>

<p>And when you get your essay done, give me a pm and I'll gladly read yours.</p>

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<p>i'll certainly do it</p>

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<p>stevenlee check your pm</p>

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<p>I can read it and give you some feedback.</p>

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<p>I can read.</p>

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<p>sent to both you guys</p>

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<p>i can read too</p>

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<p>I'll read it too.</p>