Would anyone help me critique my common app essay? I'll help yours too!

College Essays
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<p>Hi. I'm not that great in writing but this is the best i got. I already made 2 drafts and I need some readers here to give me anymore feedback. It's about how my perceptions on doctors changed... post or PM me..(: we can swap papers and give each other feedbacks.</p>

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<p>PM me your essay, I’ll send you mine in a bit!</p>

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<p>bumpppp! anyone else?</p>

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<p>I’ll help, can you look at the first part of my essay too?</p>

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<p>I can help you. PM me.</p>

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<p>Thanks! anyone else ?</p>

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<p>I’ll PM you mine, you send me yours.</p>

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<p>okay i send it to you (:.
anyone elseee?</p>