Would anyone like to critique my essay to U of I?

<p>topic is</p>

<p>In an essay of 300 words or less, choose one extracurricular activity, work experience, or community service project from the list you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you benefited from it.</p>

<p>thanks!</p>

<p>nobody wants to read my paper? <em>tear</em></p>

<p>pm me. i am more than happy to read urs</p>

<p>thanks for the input. any other opinions would be appreciated!</p>

<p>PM it to me.
or email me at: <a href="mailto:srrinath@gmail.com">srrinath@gmail.com</a><a href="hint:%20i'm%20at%20my%20email%20more%20often">/email</a></p>

<p>not an 09-er.
be forewarned, i'm very frank.</p>

<p>i emailed you...thanks!</p>

<p>anyone else?</p>

<p>I'll read it if you PM it to me.</p>

<p>I found the U of I ones rather difficult, 300 words is a tough length requirement to say what you want.</p>

<p>yup, i totally agree</p>