Would anyone like to read my transfer essay

<p>I finished my first draft of my transfer essay and just wanted someone to critique to see if I am on the right track or need some revising. I posted it up last week and no one has got back to me so this is just a repost. I would greatly appreciate your criticism and ideas on how to better my transfer essay. Thanks</p>

<p>sure pm me</p>

<p>thanks. ill pm it to you.</p>