Would anyone who was accepted to Cornell be willing to read my essay? PLEASEEE

I was hoping that someone who is either a student at Cornell or was accepted to Cornell would read my supplemental essay for CALS. It would really help. I am HS junior '21. I will email essay to anyone who is willing.

The best advice I can give you is to ensure it is “showing” and not “telling”. Speak about your accomplishments and value-add ideologies in a way that the reader would become encapsulated in the experience.