Would appreciate feedback on my essay! No concrete topic..?

College Essays
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<p>Hi, I would love it if someone would read my first attempt at my college essay. I'm wondering whether I'm going somewhere good with this or if I should pick a more focused and specific subject to write about. Feel free to be brutal. Thanks!</p>

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<p>I can read it for you. PM it over.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it…pm me.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it just PM me.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, PM to me</p>

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<p>Pm :slight_smile:
Tenchaar</p>

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<p>PM me…i’ll read it and help you with your focus.</p>

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<p>I’ll read. Pm me :)</p>

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<p>I’ll read it. PM it to me.</p>

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<p>yo PM 10char</p>