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<p>Knowledge is power. In agriculture, medicine, and industry, for example, knowledge has liberated us from hunger, disease, and tedious labor. Today, however, our knowledge has become so powerful that it is beyond our control. We know how to do many things, but we do not know where, when, or even whether this know-how should be used.</p>

<p>Assignment:
Can knowledge be a burden rather than a benefit? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>Knowledge can sometimes be a burden instead of a benefit. In the information age, knowledge is easily accessible and is quickly exchanged from person to person; however this knowledge can be a burden in some instances. There are several examples from history and literature to support this claim.</p>

<p>As demonstrated by Sir Isaac Newton during hte Scientific REvolution, knowledge can be a burden in some instances. Newton is regarded as one of the brightest thinkers in history. He is famous for formulating the three Laws of Motion. Despite his tremendous finidings, the knowledge soon became a burden to him. The Roman Catholic Church branded him a heretic when he tried to spread his knowledge. The church felt that his teachings opposed their own, and they punished him for the offence. Hence, knowledge can sometimes be consequential and burdensome.</p>

<p>Similarly demonstrated by Friar Lawrence in Romeo and Juliet, knowledge can be a heavy burden to carry. Romeo and Juliet is about two unfortunate lovers who were fated to die. They burden of knowledge is felt by Friar Lawrence, the man who married the two "star-crossed" lovers, because he knew about the two lovers' connection, but failed to tell their elders. Therefore, he feels that he is to blame for their death. If he had notified them, the two would not have had to die. Thus, knowledge can be a heavy burden for one to carry. Friar Lawrence must live with the consequences of simply knowing a truth, but not acting on it.</p>

<p>After careful analysis of the harsh life of Sir Isaac Newton and the gulit of Friar Lawrence, knowledge can indeed be a burden as opposed to a benefit. If Sir Isaac Newton and Friar Lawrence lacked the knowledge they had acquired, they might have lived happier lives.</p>

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<p>Just a few suggestions that might help to improve your score on the essay, majikarp:</p>

<p>Generally speaking, it is better to write a longer essay. CB denies this, but the correlation seems to be fairly strong nevertheless. If possible, the essay should more or less fill all of the space available. This essay seems to be a bit short to me.</p>

<p>I realize that factual inaccuracies do not count against an essay writer. Still, your statements about Isaac Newton seemed jarring to me. I am not aware of opposition to Newton from the Catholic Church. Also, the statement that Newton had a “harsh life” seems incorrect to me. He held a professorship in Cambridge. Newton was knighted, and served as Master of the Mint. I believe that he had to leave Cambridge to avoid the plague, but this circumstance was not unusually harsh for the era.</p>

<p>The example of Friar Lawrence raises a question: Was it really his knowledge that was a burden? Your paragraph makes a stronger case that the burden was his guilt over his failure to act on his knowledge, not the knowledge itself. It might be a good idea to take a bit longer to identify the best examples to support your case.</p>

<p>I’d suggest that you avoid referring to your “careful analysis” in the concluding paragraph. It’s self-congratulatory and in the case of Newton, not actually supported by the facts, as far as I know.</p>

<p>Probably a lot of students will think of Oppenheimer and the atomic bomb in response to this question. I think that good examples of the burden of knowledge can be drawn from the biomedical sciences. For example, there are genetic tests that can tell whether a person will be affected by Huntington’s disease or not. If one of a person’s parents had this disease (and the other did not), then the person has 50/50 odds of developing Huntington’s disease. A person who might be affected needs to decide whether or not to be tested. The knowledge that the person will develop Huntington’s disease could be very difficult to bear. Simply knowing that the test exists creates a burden, to some extent, of the need to decide whether to have the test or not. Beyond that, the age of onset of the disease is correlated with the number of “tandem repeats” of the base sequence CAG in a region of chromosome 4. The greater the number of repeats, the greater the severity of the disease. This creates an additional knowledge-related burden. If a person knows that he/she will develop Huntington’s disease at some point, would it be better or worse to know also how soon it will strike? </p>

<p>This is one example, but there are quite a few examples in the medical realm. The New York Times carried a story a few weeks ago about a genetic test for a rare form of melanoma, which could quite accurately predict its likelihood of recurrence after surgery. Some people choose to have the test, and some do not.</p>