<p>because i am so out of ideas..and i just would like to see what kind of stuff has been already accepted..pleaaaase?</p>
<p>there's a page on here somewhere with lots, and if you'd like I can pm you mine, or something. I got in EA, so I'm guessing they were good :)</p>
<p>^ which prompt did you use?</p>
<p>I used the he'lade prompt. I talked about running.</p>
<p>Here's my first paragraph, no stealing :)</p>
<p>Water droplets caress the trailside flowers, bird calls echo in the rising tree branches and my feet crunch the pebbles underfoot as my breath rushes out into the cool morning air, creating a small, ethereal cloud, quickly dissipating before the next breath leaves my body. There it is, turning ‘round the bend, I’ve found it, my he’lade. Luckily, my “Place Having Everything Right” is easy to find; I simply lace up my trainers, walk out the door, and begin to run.</p>
<p>Wow sentimental</p>
<p>"Water droplets caress the trailside flowers, bird calls echo in the rising tree branches and my feet crunch the pebbles underfoot as my breath rushes out into the cool morning air, creating a small, ethereal cloud, quickly dissipating before the next breath leaves my body."</p>
<p>lol, that's a really long sentence.</p>
<p>yeah... I can definatly be a comma whore... lol</p>
<p>Yay for comma whores!!!</p>
<p>hksangha, which long essay topic are you looking at?</p>
<p>my perfect place one..wanta read it.</p>
<p>Long sentences are fun to write. This was my answer for the "favorite activity" short answer on the Common App:</p>
<p>"I've enjoyed working on the International Dateline partly for the sense of accomplishment that comes with producing a newspaper of astounding quality for a high school publication, and for everything it's taught me about style, writing objectively, layout and graphics, and the ever-important deadlines, but just as much for the friends I've made and the particular sort of bond that forms between people who of their own free will choose to spend entire weekends cooped up in a windowless basement scarfing down glazed donuts and arguing about punctuation and whether the margins are aligned. As the subeditor responsible for the News and Features section, I’ve learned leadership and confidence; as photography editor, I’ve been able to explore my interest in photojournalism; and as copyeditor, I’ve learned that if any pen cuts deeper than the sword, it’s probably the red one."</p>
<p>The first sentence is 94 words long. :p</p>
<p>I'll read and edit for you.</p>
<p>ok whats ur email</p>
<p>I PMed it to you.</p>