<p>If anyone might be willing to give me any suggestions, I'd be extremely grateful.</p>
<p>Thank you very much.</p>
<p>The most you should look for is someone to spell check it. How about someone who knows you? Colleges are looking for original work…from you, your ideas. They will know if it isn’t yours.</p>
<p>If you want suggestions on general essay crafting, the net is full of them. Try a Google search.</p>
<p>^^Not true. If he/she has already written an essay, it is perfectly acceptable at any university for someone to read it and make suggestions (I’m not volunteering because I’m just not that good at this). Had he asked for suggestions without having an essay written, that would be dishonorable.</p>