Would someone please look over my Common App essay and supplements? I'm afraid they're weak :(

Hi all! I need some fresh pairs of eyes to check my CommonApp essay before I submit. I have that dreaded feeling that is’s weak. :o All feedback/criticism would be appreciated. Please help me out on this! I will read yours too! :slight_smile:
PM me and let me know.
Thanks in advance!

I’ll look at it. I don’t know how much help I’ll be but I’ll look and edit as much as I can.