<p>i'm writing an email to Vassar's head fencing coach, and I'm basically trying to find out if he can take my application to admissions and help me in the process. how is this for the email?:</p>
<p>Dear Coach,</p>
<p>After careful consideration and discussion with my parents and college advisor, I am excited to inform you that I have decided to apply ED1 to Vassar. I have been working on my application, and I was wondering if I should send you a copy for the admissions process. Do you have any advice for me in terms of the process?</p>
<p>Have you had contact with this coach before? If not, then that's a terrible email.</p>
<p>If it's the first contact try:</p>
<p>I have decided to apply to Vassar under the ED1 program. I am a competitive fencer blah blah blah I have attached an athletic resume blah blah blah. I am interested in competing for Vassar if accepted. Could you please send me information about your program. </p>
<p>Etc.</p>
<p>The coach does not want to see your application. He/she can, however, take your stats (GPA and test scores etc) down the admissions office and run them by someone to get a preliminary read on what your chances are.</p>
<p>Vassar is a DIII school. With significantly more women than men. The average DIII coach only has so much influence on admissions (at many schools it's pretty darn close to none) and I cannot imagine that men's fencing would be a high priority.</p>
<p>Be sure to send the coach a list of your achievements/placings etc. so that he can see if he's even interested in you as an athlete. If he is, he'll respond. Although, it's August, he may already have his athletes for this cycle of admissions.</p>
<p>i actually am very friendly with the coach, he used to work at my old club, and he's a very amiable guy, and i've already told him my scores, etc. he's trying to build his team up and he's already told me that he wants me to fill one of his positions. i just want him to tell me how much pull he has with admissions.</p>
<p>Copy the coach your application with a note saying how hopeful you are that you will be accepted and able to compete with his team. If he wants you on the team then he will do whatever he can to help your application. Do not put him on the spot about admissions... even coaches at division one schools in the revenue sports never guarantee admission for a prospective athlete. sometimes, things are better left unsaid. Having said that, if your decision to apply ED is dependent on being on the team, then I would ask him if he is holding a spot on his roster for you so you know whether or not to "spend" your ED at his school or use it at another school where you can be guaranteed a apot on the team. Good luck.</p>