<p>A fixing sentences question:</p>
<p>In addition to scientific talent, Santiago had artistic talent, (as is evidenced by the excellent drawings) in his papers about the nervous system.</p>
<p>(A) (as it is)
(D) his excellent drawings as evidence, appearing </p>
<p>The correct answer is (D). Can someone please explain how (A) is better than (D)? Also can someone plz explain the difference between "as is evidenced by" and "as evidenced by" and "as evidenced in".</p>
<p>The reason D is correct is because A is written in passive voice. In the SAT, passive voice is usually incorrect formal English. Plus, D is more streamlined, more efficient, less awkward, and more easy to read.</p>
<p>First of all, “as is evidenced by” is the same thing as “as evidenced by”. The “is” isn’t necessary. “as evidenced in” is an improper idiomatic usage. Rather, we say “as evidenced by”.</p>
<p>Sorry, my bad. The correct answer is (A), meant to say (A). And I am following your exact line of reasoning eagle4022. Any ideas?</p>
<p>“his excellent drawings as evidence” isn’t a clause at all. How can you plug a non-cluase between two comma. </p>
<p>And appearing is categorically wrong.</p>
<p>Can you please explain how “his excellent drawings as evidence” isn’t a clause? It seems to me that it is possible to move this to the front of the entire statement, so I think it should be a clause.</p>
<p>bump. plz help!</p>
<p>“He excellent drawings as evidence, appearing…” is a complete sentence, awkward but it’s in Independent</p>
<p>So the comma wouldn’t work.</p>
<p>I disagree. If it is a sentence, then there must be a predicate. I don’t see a verb in the clause “his excellent drawings as evidence”.</p>
<p>Well, </p>
<p>It’s D because “…Santiago had artistic talent,… appearing…”</p>
<p>Now I’m more confused as ever. The correct answer is (A) (which I typed out incorrectly in the first post and corrected myself in the third post because I don’t know how to edit my post). “appearing” should modify “drawings”, because there’s a comma before “appearing”, so I assume that (D) makes a lot more sense. Help please!</p>
<p>Is this from the blue book?..</p>
<p>In the SAT, passive voice is usually incorrect formal English.</p>
<p>That’s fairly obvious nonsense. Passive voice is not incorrect–not on the SAT and not anywhere else.</p>
<p>There is nothing wrong with (A), above–“as evidenced by” just means “as shown by.”</p>
<p>smarty1201: nope, it’s from the jan 2012 q&a. (last question of section 10)
jgoggs: yes, obviously passive voice is correct grammatically. The pro
lem is: why choose (A) over (D)?</p>
<p>bumpabump…SAT coming up in 3 days. HELPPPP!!!</p>
<p>I’m guessing it’s A because
“Santiago had artistic talent…, appearing IN his paper…” </p>
<p>The “in” sounds wrong to me…</p>
<p>In addition to scientific talent, Santiago had artistic talent, (as is evidenced by the excellent drawings) in his papers about the nervous system.
(A) (as it is)
(D) his excellent drawings as evidence, appearing </p>
<p>With (D), the anwer reads:
In addition to scientific talent, Santiago had artistic talent, his excellent drawings as evidence, appearing in his papers about the nervous system.</p>
<p>There is an ambiguity error, in which we do not know what “appearing” refers to: the evidence or the artistic talent.</p>
<p>“appear in” seems to be the correct usage(after speed googling), and I personally don’t see how it is wrong. SAT in TWO days!!! HHHHHHHHELLLLLLLPPPPPP!!!</p>
<p>ccuser001: I posted a similar question, but after going through like 10+ practice tests that contain this particular structure, I believe that it is safe to assume that appearing modifies “drawings”.
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