Yet another essay thread...

<p>Want to critique mine?</p>

<p>Blue book #8. Prompt: Should heroes be defined as people who have the courage to say what they think when we ourselves lack the courage to say it?</p>

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<p>What is a hero? Is it someone who puts him or herself in physical danger for the sake of someone else, like the heroes so often portrayed on television? This is not always the case. A hero can be someone who risks something on an emotional level, too. Atticus Finch, in the novel To Kill A Mockingbird, and the 1960s civil rights activist Martin Luther King are two epitomes of heroes. They expressed their own controversial beliefs for the sake of those people too meek to do so, which is what a true hero does.</p>

<p>In the southern town of Maycomb, Alabama, a man named Atticus Finch proves himself a hero. Finch, an attorney, is the only one in town to say what he thinks is right. As the sole supporter of the black man Tom Robinson, who has been wrongfully prosecuted for a rape he did not commit, Finch carries a great onus on his shoulders. Robinson's black family and friends and even the entire remainder of the town all lack the bravery to defend the innocent man. Even though Finch does not partake in a heroic gunfight, he is still a hero, because he risks disapproval, ridicule, and even hatred from his peers, yet he remains resolute in his beliefs. That is what a veritable hero must do.</p>

<p>The reverend Martin Luther King proved himself a hero in America in the 1960s. His cause was analogous to that of Atticus Finch-- he was fighting for equal rights for African Americans. Again, his heroism did not manifest itself in the form of putting his life in danger. Instead, he spoke out against millions of racist Americans, declaring that people of every color should have equal rights. King spearheaded a much-needed movement representing countless black Americans who faced despicable discrimination. Had he done nothing but make speeches and protest verbally, Martin Luther King would have still been remembered as a hero-- because he spoke out for people who didn't have the courage to do so.</p>

<p>A man or woman doesn't have to dodge bullets or jump into burning buildings to be heroic. True heroism lies in facing disapproval and enmity, but still speaking one's mind. It requires a great deal of courage to stand up for the rights of people who are too afraid-- it takes the courage of a hero.</p>

<p>10 Minimum. Since the essay's are subjective, hard to say for sure, but I would say 11-12. </p>

<p>Comisar, have you found it's better to write about 2 subjects? I used to have the mindset that I needed 3, but that's really hard especially if you want to get into any detail. I plan on writing 1-2 examples on my essay.</p>

<p>Awesome, thanks.</p>

<p>I don't think I've ever written a practice essay that had any more or less than two examples. I simply don't have the time/space to do three, but I don't think one is enough. Two usually seems to work, though.</p>

<p>Yeah, I really don't believe in the mindset of going in there thinking "I need 3 examples", that just puts too much pressure on you. My first essay on the SAT (a real one >_<) was sooo bad because I felt all this pressure to write 3 examples. I had two great ones, and instead of focusing on them I wrote unintelligibly about Pele for 6 lines before running out of time. The 8 I recieved felt mighty generous.</p>

<p>Can anybody else look at the essay? :)</p>

<p>great vocab and fluidity, syntax....ect. I found myself thoroughly engaged. your essay had a sharp focus and I, as a reader, never felt you deviate from your central argument. The only thing is that it seems a little short, but then again when you type something the length looks way different than if you handwrite it. I always use 2 examples and find that is the best medium for me in terms of being detailed enough. </p>

<p>I would say a 10-11. But could be a 12. </p>

<p>Can I download your essay? I really like it. I just want to read it over again and use it as an example.</p>

<p>Thanks for the comments! I hope it was long enough... because I filled every line, and I don't think I can write much smaller haha.</p>

<p>And yes, feel free to download/save it or whatever. I'm flattered :D</p>