A college app essay about...Pokemon?! (Readers needed for two essays!)

College Essays
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<p>Hey everyone! I recently finished writing an essay that I may use for Common app supplements that requires an additional essay. It is about Pokemon, but I feel like it's a little long and maybe too complicated. I'm not quite sure how to go about fixing it, though, so any readers would be greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>I also need some help on my common app long essay, which is about my love of photo manipulation. I sent this essay to my college counselor, and she wants me to move one paragraph earlier in the essay. I can't figure out a good way to integrate this paragraph in earlier, however, so if anybody could take a look at it, that would be great.</p>

<p>If anybody's interested in reading either essay, let me know which one, and I will PM it to you. Writing is one of my weaker areas, so any help would be greatly appreciated!</p>

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<p>I’m interested! It sounds really cool o-o I have a friend who submitted a Pokemon essay to Northwestern and he was accepted :smiley: PM it over</p>

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<p>You can PM it to me.</p>

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<p>same dude. pm me.</p>

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<p>how interesting : ] ill be glad to read it</p>

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<p>i have to read this. send it over</p>

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<p>id love to read it</p>

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<p>Can you PM me? This sounds like something refreshing.</p>

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<p>I would love to read that! Pm that over</p>

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<p>Thanks guys; I think I have enough readers for the Pokemon essay.</p>

<p>Is anybody interested in reading my photo manipulation essay to see if they can help me figure out how to move one of the paragraphs earlier?</p>

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<p>sounds interesting, id like to read it too</p>

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<p>lol Id love to read the pokemon one too</p>

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<p>a pokemon essay?! i gotta read this.</p>

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<p>I would love to read both essays if I can… just PM them.</p>

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<p>i’d love to read it</p>

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<p>I’d love to read it too!</p>

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<p>That sounds pretty cool. I’d love to read it! :)</p>

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<p>id love to read it!!!</p>