A kind fella willing to read my NW essay?

<p>I know it's Christams but as a procrastinating 08er I am writing my app essays -.-
I didn't have lots of time so for the why Northwestern essay prompt, I tried to keep it concise.
People tell me I write awkward sentences and since I'm not a native English speaker, I would appreciate any input + criticisms. Thanks!</p>

<p>I'm a Northwestern applicant too, but if you dont mind you can PM it over.</p>