<p>Hello,</p>
<p>I've already submitted my transfer essays, which unfortunately saw only a few pairs of eyes before I turned them in. My problem is that I have a definite tendency for wordy, slightly ornate language. It's the way I naturally write, and often bleeds into my speech (yes, I can be a rather odd duck).</p>
<p>I asked my proofreader if the language was too stilted, but he said it was acceptable. Well, after I submitted it, I rephrased my question and asked him if it flowed well, and he said no, but that was just the way I write, and the essays represented my personality fairly accurately. I hope the tone of my essays was moderately informal, despite loads of $10 words. Would the "plethora of verbiage" be a dealbreaker?</p>
<p>Thanks,
A Frazzled Student</p>