Anyone mind critiquing my essay?

<p>I would love some feedback and criticism about my essay. I know I'm not the strongest writer and would love someone's opinion who is.</p>

<p>I can read it for you!</p>

<p>I can read your essay! But the thing is, I too am applying this year. But don’t worry, plagiarising isn’t my thing</p>

<p>I’ll help! :)</p>

<p>I can help as well!</p>