Anyone want to comment on my essay?

[dumpsterpaul]

<p>Kinda a spur of the moment thing. Is it too preachy or cliche?</p>

<p>email me at <a href="mailto:dumpsterpaul@gmail.com">dumpsterpaul@gmail.com</a></p>

[Dave17]

<p>ill read it and critique for you. PM it over.</p>

[MAStFROWW]

<p>same here. PM it</p>